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Ed Lebowitz’s Critique of “Promises, Lies, and Jelly Doughnuts” by George Talbot ©

In Critique on October 31, 2011 at 5:56 am

Ed Lebowitz’s Critique of “Promises, Lies, and Jelly Doughnuts.”

Theme/intent: “Promises, Lies and Jelly Doughnuts” is a funny and happy story in which the main characters triumph over adversity by looking out for each other and honoring each others’ interests.

What I liked:

Opening: The first paragraph presents the two problems the protagonist James faces, finding a wife and caring for his daffy aunt, in a first person voice that is familiar and pleasant. You like the protagonist and care about him because of his modesty regarding his attractiveness to women and his filial attitude toward his mother and aunt.  The first paragraph also makes it clear the story will be funny. Read the rest of this entry »